Sleeping Valor

The italic's is her writting, though I am debating if it should be her thoughts just because then I'd have to find another way to indicate thoughts. So it maybe ...

^_^ Well if you get stuck feel free to ask for help and ideas.

Thanks for the comments, I think I made all the changes except the one about "he considered himself lucky to even remember...". That one I left because, though I realise ...

a) I like it. b) We are kindred spirits c) I love helping people, especially the ones who appreciate it. ^_^ No idea why, I just do. =P

The tense is fine then, like I said I wasn't sure. As for the description, maybe try moving it back to where she is describing the attacker. Something like(back right ...

That night was my last night, although I obviously didn't know it at the time. It was my last night as a human. Repeating 'night' is redundant. It also takes ...

:D Saase is a world concept. I unfortunately haven't yet solidified the actual plot that takes place on said world. >.< But it was alot of fun to write! (and ...

lol. Unfortunately that is my weakness. The major points. I've got all the side-plots and twists and I can create a world concept off the top of my head, but ...

lol. It is! Hopefully you don't have my curse: if I'm not sitting in a car of a bus I tend to pace around while I daydream and sometimes actually ...

=P I'll try not to die from anticipation. :D Ooooooh. If you're super bored you could look at some of the things I put up. Only 2 recenly I think. ...

*wants to say she shoukd post it* >.< You probably shouldn't. Think of all the poor people who haven't seen what you've already put up! Flooding the boards will probably ...

What I felt, or rather the lack of what I felt could only be described as death. I couldn't feel anything , not even the hard surface I was lying ...

She decided to proceed with caution…but it didn’t matter. He’d been waiting. She was only halfway past the car when it suddenly went into reverse and she was violently thrown ...

...but this was more for ceremony than any practical purpose since all his food was cooked by the finest chefs in the Empire now. ...his gaze traveling from his hooked ...

He always is trying to s t ick on me some dumb story or get me to recite a knight’s code. I think that's what you meant to write but ...